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xcutiexprincessx69 by ~cool4dude:iconcool4dude:



I waited a half an hour to see if you'd get online
and now that you are I'm waiting 5 minutes
to greet you so I don't seem clingy or desperate.

Then you ask about my day followed by a sideways smiley face
colon: parenthesis)

And I make up something about a 2 mile walk-
when in reality all I did was watch back to back episodes
of Star Trek: Deep Space 9.

Then I sit back and wait because you seem to be typing an awful lot,
but in 5 minutes when I receive the message it's just the letters "L O L"
A secret code that means you have nothing interesting to say,
and neither do I but comfortable silence doesn't exist on the Internet.

So I ask you "whats up?"
and fade away into a thought bubble
where your eyes are deep brown-
like a puddle on the playground.
Your blonde curls sway in the wind of an oscillating fan-
like you were going down a slide,
And your typing fingers draw scenes
with white sidewalk chalk
of squirrels crawling up pine trees
while rain spews down on a triangle house
with frowny face girl-
but with a ping from my computer speaker that thought fades.
And I have to wait long enough to reply so it seems like I've fully read,
and understood your story before I can type back-
clunking my thick fingers against the dusty gray letters
of my keyboard.

This is the online dance that we do,
but I can only imagine my hand on your hip-
swaying way off beat of the music,
but perfectly in sync with you like we
were on playground swings,
and then you inform me that
"we're married."
©2006-2009 ~cool4dude
:iconcool4dude:

Author's Comments

If you are so inclined you can hear me read this poem by going to http://lofipoetry.nubreath.net and downloading either "The Other EP" for the computer mic version, or my live reading at from 2006-08-29 at Amazing Grace.

Anyway, this will probably be the last poem I submit on dA for quite awhile.

Daily Deviation

Given 2006-10-04

xcutiexprincessx69 by =cool4dude is a poem for our time. (Suggested by =Spiff-Johnson and Featured by `imperfect)

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:iconhummuss:
oh this is grande. I really like it Shaun. I have to admit I did not get fully on board with it until the 4th paragraph. but I think that has to do with my preconceived notions of on-line chat and not the content. But the ending is quite powerful.

so why this is the last poem for a while?

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"Seeing into darkness is clarity. Knowing how to yield is strength". -Lao Tse

Here is a short story I wrote called The Wishing Well:
:star:[link]
:iconcool4dude:
I am not totally down with the dA vibe at the moment, and I am also not totally in a "Write new stuff" mode right now. I am very much more interested in experimenting with writing, doing "exersizes" if you will, and stretching my writing, but not necessarily expecting it to weild results that are "complete" or "poems" persay. if that makes sense.

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:cheese: Somebody should go stand with the cheese...it's alone :cheese:
:iconspiff-johnson:
:thumbsup: I've already critiqued this one!

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"I have this need to (pro)create with no strings attached, like a real boy!" Pinocchio said.


Twitter: Clicky Clicky
:iconhummuss:
it does. in fact I think I have been like that for some time myself, although I always think to myself that I am going to write something great and submit it to DA. It just hasn't happened, hence the lack of poetry deviations. good luck.

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"Seeing into darkness is clarity. Knowing how to yield is strength". -Lao Tse

Here is a short story I wrote called The Wishing Well:
:star:[link]
:icontomf00lery:
I really, really, really like this piece. I like the realness of it. And the quirkiness. And the ability to relate to it in my own way.
:iconcool4dude:
haha, I think most people who've conversed on the internet can hopefully relate a little to it. I'd like to think I'm not the only one!

Thanks :thumbsup:

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:cheese: Somebody should go stand with the cheese...it's alone :cheese:
:iconcitizenvisuelle:
I so hope that soon , when I leave my door , I always check for your book to be in my bag.so I can read these things wherever I go.and see how it changes with changing background sound.Or if I learn to understand more of it , while growing.

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[link]
for the drawing with words..
:iconcrazyquesadilla:
This is going to be the first poem I've faved. Or one of the first, or something like that, probably the second one I've faved. But still, this is awesome.

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... That's what she said.
:iconcool4dude:
lol I am honored to have taken your poetry +fav virginity...however if I am sloppy seconds, that is a bummer...

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:cheese: Somebody should go stand with the cheese...it's alone :cheese:
:iconspiff-johnson:
you owe me an hj AND a bj.

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"I have this need to (pro)create with no strings attached, like a real boy!" Pinocchio said.


Twitter: Clicky Clicky

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